Wednesday, 30 October 2013

Scary Story

This is a story that I had to do for History.  The theme was a scary story about something in your life or a made up story.
Forest Fire
Driving happily down the mountainside, I talked to my thirteen-year-old friend named Mary next to me.  The two families were returning to their home and coming back from a very exhausting, all-morning hike in the mountains.  Mary said something funny; I laughed and twisted my head to the filthy window.  The van curved sharply and unending bends while inside the van people talked and laughed.  Suddenly the land around us converted into steep, scary looking, and very dark.  Then the van turned a corner so sharply that I thought the car would fall off the hill!  Ah, finally flat terrain, I thought to myself looking out the glass in the front of the car.  I stopped talking to my friend because I started feeling a little sick and uneasy.

Then the car curved another bend and suddenly, looking ahead, there was an enormous cloud of smoke and ashes.  The car slowed down and everybody gasped. “There is a forest fire!” shouted Mary.  The two cars came to a stop and everybody hopped out with cameras in their hands.  The families walked to the edge and saw the monstrous roar of fire bursting up from the trees.  I choked as I breathed the smoke, and squinted when the smoke caught into my shocked, hurting eyes.  The forest fire just started and was demolishing any living thing in its path.  Unexpectedly the fire hit something really burnable and a big bang sounded in the air and fire burst out from everywhere.  The two families started running to the car. “It’s spreading,” I said.


Every person jumped into the car as fast as they could and the car started.  All of us were relieved and breathing heavily.  Mary and I looked at the fire in horror. Did anyone else know about the fire? The air conditioner cooled and comforted them quickly. The car finally came out of the dull and rocky mountains and into the smooth, wide road.  They, surprisingly, did not see anybody or anything around.  Every single person in the two vans felt relief from the forest fire, and they slept safely in their own beds that night.


12 comments:

  1. Wow!! Amazing Lucas, you have a gift. Can you write some more? I really enjoyed that. I love the suspense and detail you put in there!! :)

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  2. VERY good Lucas, I loved it!!

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  3. Thank you so much girls!! That was really kind of you! Yes i will be doing more stuff like this!

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  4. Super job!! That would be terribly scary!! I thought,bringing in the camera was definitely a Grzesiak.
    Loved reading it and can't wait to read more! Love you

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  5. Thank you so much guys! That was really nice!

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  6. nice job Lucas I like it a lot

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